1. Check for plagiarism, and if found, try and convert the text into your own words but let the essence stay
2. Give the essay a better ending pose a rhetoric question at the end
3. Mention the thesis in the first paragraph, and that is Societal pressure and ostracization that led to her murder also the way in which she conducted her affair For more information on Societal pressure check on this:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Peer_pressure