To revise from the feedback you have got from the lecturer is really useful. Your writing tends towards descriptive rather than analytical and needs to find a way to bring some higher-level discussion, analysis, evaluation, and your own original insights into your work. I’ve left you some tips in this feedback. I know you are keen to make that progress towards being an academic and you have all the right attributes, it might mean re-learning the way that you work a little.For more information on The Prophetic Call of Moses check on this:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Moses